:)
What book is the first part of that comment from? Something like Freakonomics? (the buying off their guilt part)
does anyone else always think of harry potter when they hear "the greater good"? or is that just me...
choc-oat chip cookies are amazing :P
I never understood why someone didn't tell her "Ella, don't do anything unless you want to."
Shouldn't feel bad, not shouldn't vote No Way, sorry I should have made that clearer
thats pretty good! just a few things.... freaked out needs a comma after it
when the voice says do not walk away i think you might want to make the character a little more scared.....
pretend
mini dart is a little wierd in a spooky story, you could use a knife or something
brushing my teeth needs a comma after it
but other than that its really good.
Cudos to whoever copied this.
I mean really, what horror story is right without some commas, random voices, and mini darts?
very true. :D so annoyed that you feel lazy, and then annoyed at the fact that you are lazy.
if that makes some form of sense.
That's cuz it's been proven that redheaded women are found much more attractive than redheaded men and yeah you know how they always make people in movies attractive
:)
What book is the first part of that comment from? Something like Freakonomics? (the buying off their guilt part)
does anyone else always think of harry potter when they hear "the greater good"? or is that just me...
choc-oat chip cookies are amazing :P
I never understood why someone didn't tell her "Ella, don't do anything unless you want to."
Shouldn't feel bad, not shouldn't vote No Way, sorry I should have made that clearer
thats pretty good! just a few things....
freaked out needs a comma after it
when the voice says do not walk away i think you might want to make the character a little more scared.....
pretend
mini dart is a little wierd in a spooky story, you could use a knife or something
brushing my teeth needs a comma after it
but other than that its really good.
Cudos to whoever copied this.
I mean really, what horror story is right without some commas, random voices, and mini darts?
very true. :D so annoyed that you feel lazy, and then annoyed at the fact that you are lazy.
if that makes some form of sense.
That's cuz it's been proven that redheaded women are found much more attractive than redheaded men
and yeah you know how they always make people in movies attractive